This definitely does sound like a second Zaphkiel. Honestly though, I'm really just not feeling the melody nearly as much as Zaphkiel. A good way to put it is that with this, I have to to try to get it stuck in my head, whereas Zaphkiel immediately stuck. I feel like this is trying a bit too hard to recreate Zaphkiel, and in the process, loses what was special about it. Especially the drop just doesn't feel like a natural progression.